Comments on: Sun’s Revised Contributor Agreement http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/ Tue, 31 Jan 2012 01:23:03 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=abc By: » Blog Archive » BLAWG REVIEW #139 http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/comment-page-1/#comment-23814 » Blog Archive » BLAWG REVIEW #139 Mon, 17 Dec 2007 11:32:52 +0000 http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/#comment-23814 [...] Clearly, what you say and how you say it is important.  It can go a long way towards avoiding liability and improving business relationships.  When done right it’s a win-win!  Ray Ward discusses the value of short sentences and cites Joanne Young’s 10 Commandments for Writing.  And for lawyers trying to battle legalese, some plain language guidance is offered by The Party of the First Part and Wayne Schiess’s Legal Writing Blog with a special tip of the hat going to Sun Microsystems for putting plain language into action with its newly revised contributor agreement. [...] [...] Clearly, what you say and how you say it is important.  It can go a long way towards avoiding liability and improving business relationships.  When done right it’s a win-win!  Ray Ward discusses the value of short sentences and cites Joanne Young’s 10 Commandments for Writing.  And for lawyers trying to battle legalese, some plain language guidance is offered by The Party of the First Part and Wayne Schiess’s Legal Writing Blog with a special tip of the hat going to Sun Microsystems for putting plain language into action with its newly revised contributor agreement. [...]

]]> By: Ken Adams http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/comment-page-1/#comment-23527 Ken Adams Sat, 15 Dec 2007 19:31:40 +0000 http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/#comment-23527 Mike: How to express both parties is always a problem when you use the first and second person. I agree with your suggestion. Ken Mike: How to express both parties is always a problem when you use the first and second person. I agree with your suggestion. Ken

]]> By: Mike http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/comment-page-1/#comment-23519 Mike Sat, 15 Dec 2007 18:36:52 +0000 http://www.adamsdrafting.com/2007/12/13/sun-revised-contributor-agreement/#comment-23519 I don't have a problem with the first and second person, but it really gets annoying when you have to start playing preposition games "us" means "Sun", but "both of us" means "you" and "us" and "we" means "Sun." Frankly, I think "you" is okay in this context, but I think using "Sun" in place of "us" and "we" makes more sense. As an aside, I think that there are also a lot of things i would improve. I don’t have a problem with the first and second person, but it really gets annoying when you have to start playing preposition games “us” means “Sun”, but “both of us” means “you” and “us” and “we” means “Sun.”

Frankly, I think “you” is okay in this context, but I think using “Sun” in place of “us” and “we” makes more sense.

As an aside, I think that there are also a lot of things i would improve.

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