OK, it’s categories-of-contract-language time again! More specifically, the topic is language of policy, which states rules for how the contract works. Language of policy relates to stuff that happens automatically, as in This agreement is governed by German law.
One shortcoming in language of policy is when you use structures analogous to the passive voice, as in Rent is payable on the first day of each month. See this 2016 post another example of that. But this post is about something different, namely the way language of policy can become even more opaque if you use jargon—shorthand that won’t be accessible to every reader and that requires the reader to fill gaps.
Consider this example, which seems to state a rule instead of requiring Acme to do anything:
Acme will have a lead-time of up to 45 days from accepting a Purchase Order for scheduling Services.
The following version expresses the same meaning much more clearly by articulating what having a lead time actually means and by otherwise being less clipped:
No later than 45 days after it receives a Purchase Order, Acme shall notify the Customer of the schedule for performing the Services requested in that Purchase Order.
It uses ten more words, but they’re well worth it.
Here’s another example:
Payment terms are net 30 from the date of the invoice.
It could be made slightly less opaque by saying 30 days, but the big fix would be to add an actor:
The Customer shall pay each invoice no later than 30 days from the date of the invoice.
In this case, the risk of confusion would seem negligible—this jargon is widely used. But it’s best to think not in terms of risk but in terms of clarity. If provisions involve parties doing stuff, they’re easier to read if you express them that way instead of using jargon or finding other ways to hide the actor. Apply that approach in all your drafting, instead of making occasional exceptions for usages that might not be bad enough to bother excluding them. It’s easier to be consistent, and it benefits readers.
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