It’s by Jason Waterman from the Crown Commercial Service and Warren Smith from Government Digital Service, and it’s entitled Working together to design government contracts for the digital age. It’s commendable, and it says the sorts of things you’d expect. Until we see some examples of what they come up with, there’s not much one can say in response. [Updated 17 July 2016: Well, I’ve learned that we do have an example; see Mark Anderson’s comment. If I had seen that example previously, I wouldn’t have written this post. Mr Waterman and Mr Smith are in need of a serious reality check.] But the following thoughts came to mind:
- Throughout their post they refer to “users.” It might be helpful if they were to be clear who they’re referring to. I suggest that anyone who’s involved in drafting, reviewing, negotiating, enforcing, or even just reading a contract is a “user.”
- It’s all well and good to talk about clarity and simplicity, but no one would confuse even modern business contracts with other forms of writing—the prose of business contracts is more limited and stylized. So the GOV.UK style guide would be of strictly limited use. And even when you eliminate jargon and unnecessary terms of art, you’ll be left of terms of art that you can’t avoid without adding a lot of explication. So what’s required it a style guide for contract language. A Manual of Style for Contract Drafting is the only serious attempt in that direction, but it’s too exhaustive to act as a broad-based style guide. You can expect something more manageable from me in the next year or two.
- Jason and Warren should be prepared to question all their assumptions and terminology. For example, they use in their post the phrase terms and conditions. It’s a phrase used by contracts people the world over, but it’s an unnecessary “doublet”—a condition is a kind of term, so just say terms.
- I wish Jason and Warren luck in purging UK government contracts of a tendency that English courts and lawyers are particularly prone to—the urge to attribute occult meaning to everyday words and phrases. For more on that, see this item in The Lawyer.
- When it comes to drafting, I hope that instead of relying on static standard forms, the UK powers that be consider using automated contract creation, with users creating a draft by answering an annotated online questionnaire.
I look forward to seeing how this project progresses.