It’s generally a bad sign when, barely after it begins, a sentence shifts into a set of enumerated clauses:
If (1) A, (2), B, or (3) C, then X.
Acme shall (1) A, (2) B, and (3) C.
In such sentences, the drafter is forcing the reader to make a connection between each enumerated clause and the stub beginning of the sentence. In the first example, it would be better to incorporate the stub into each of the enumerated conditional clauses. (It’s a separate question whether the conditional clauses should go after the matrix clause, then X; I mention that issue in MSCD 2.175.) In the second example, it would be better to create three separate sentences or find some way to expand the opening stub.
